Saturday, July 29, 2006

Flitter in the Storm
By Don Iannone

As thunder roars
and lightning strikes
courage grows
and morning breaks.
Amidst it all
songbird sings
and from that moment
life forever rings.

13 comments:

samuru999 said...

Another great poem from you Don!
Nothing less... of-course!
I really like this one a lot!

As for my voice... a songbird I
am not. I do like to sing though.
Maybe I will sing that poem and
see how it sounds.
I bet you could sing it quite
nicely though.

Don Iannone said...

Give it a shot. Like you, I like to sing...but that doesn;t cut it. LOL

Mike said...

Hi Don,

Normally I get a lot out of your choice of imagery, but this poem stands out by its rhythm and rhyme. It has a nice quick pace and chipper tone. One thing I'd like to see is a "faster" last line. It is only 1 syllable longer than "and morning breaks," but the sounds in "quietly" take a long time to say, which slows the line down dramatically. For a consistent rhythm, I'd like to see it read more quickly, like line 4. But perhaps you intended the slowdown, in which case, leave it. :)

Don Iannone said...

Mike...thanks. Did a couple tweaks. Like the longer last line though.

polona said...

birdsong after the thunderstorm makes it worth living...
hope you don't mind i put a link on my blog

Don Iannone said...

Polona...I'm flattered. Link away. Thanks.

Poetry by Kai said...

excellent

Kathleen said...

very nice.. clear and crisp... with ringing tones...! :)

Don Iannone said...

Thank you Kai. Appreciate your comments always.

Kathleen...thank you too and appreciate yours.

dumbdodi said...

Oh Don, a little birdie left this poem on my blog for me to read!!!!
Delightful, short and sweet

Don Iannone said...

Dumbdodi...small world. Can you imagine that. LOL. Enjoy your weekend.

silvermoon said...

Hmm- nature sings for me.
Lovely "filter."

Don Iannone said...

Thanks Silvermoon. Just tried to access your blog but couldn't get it to come up.

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