Wednesday, April 18, 2007

yellow goldfinches
feverishly feed on thistle
sprightly sweet voices
rise like the ocean tide
clouds hitchhike across the sky

Note: Don's first taiga
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12 comments:

Anonymous said...

Don, this is good!

If I might make one sugggestion, it would be to change "rising" to "rises".


You did a wonderful job on this one! Spring and so much more captured in five lines!

4:25 PM
Anonymous said...

Whoops! I mean, "rise", not "rises". :)

4:26 PM
Don Iannone, D.Div., Ph.D. said...

Aurora...Thanks. Made the verb tense change. I'll have to work at this.

6:25 PM
J. Andrew Lockhart said...

first one! very nice --- I want to see more! :)

12:25 AM
Don Iannone, D.Div., Ph.D. said...

Thanks Aurora. Your nudge is moving in the right direction.

Thanks Andrew. Stay tuned. Any suggestions would be much appreciated since you work with this form a great deal.

4:48 AM
floots said...

great stuff don
also interested to see how different your goldfinches are to the UK birds of the same name

6:41 AM
Pat Paulk said...

Don, I love it!! I feed these boogers 10#'s of thistle a week. Small price to have them around.

8:06 AM
polona said...

oh, i love this one, don.
and like floots, i'm quite amazed to see your goldfinches are from the european birds.

1:51 PM
QUASAR9 said...

Beautiful!

4:35 PM
Don Iannone, D.Div., Ph.D. said...

Thanks Q, Polona, Pat, and Floots. Stay tuned. This is a new form for me, so we'll see...It's a nice change. Aurora suggested I move in this direction. I appreciate her nudge.

6:30 PM
Dan said...

And a wonderful taiga it is!

10:41 AM
Anonymous said...

clouds hitchhiking? i love it!

1:16 PM

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