Wednesday, April 18, 2007

yellow goldfinches
feverishly feed on thistle
sprightly sweet voices
rise like the ocean tide
clouds hitchhike across the sky

Note: Don's first taiga

12 comments:

  1. Anonymous4:25 PM

    Don, this is good!

    If I might make one sugggestion, it would be to change "rising" to "rises".


    You did a wonderful job on this one! Spring and so much more captured in five lines!

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  2. Anonymous4:26 PM

    Whoops! I mean, "rise", not "rises". :)

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  3. Aurora...Thanks. Made the verb tense change. I'll have to work at this.

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  4. first one! very nice --- I want to see more! :)

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  5. Thanks Aurora. Your nudge is moving in the right direction.

    Thanks Andrew. Stay tuned. Any suggestions would be much appreciated since you work with this form a great deal.

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  6. great stuff don
    also interested to see how different your goldfinches are to the UK birds of the same name

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  7. Don, I love it!! I feed these boogers 10#'s of thistle a week. Small price to have them around.

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  8. oh, i love this one, don.
    and like floots, i'm quite amazed to see your goldfinches are from the european birds.

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  9. Thanks Q, Polona, Pat, and Floots. Stay tuned. This is a new form for me, so we'll see...It's a nice change. Aurora suggested I move in this direction. I appreciate her nudge.

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  10. And a wonderful taiga it is!

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  11. Anonymous1:16 PM

    clouds hitchhiking? i love it!

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