If I had found this in a fortune cookie, I'd have been amazed at how apt these sentiments are for me in particular. And "when all else fails, turning our pain over to it, to let it shelter us..." a true cleansing of the soul.
don, i hope you won't mind my adding a few words here.
i really like your little inspirational poems, but i have problems calling them haiku.
you know, metaphors (along with simile, personification, personal involvment, judgments...) are to be avoided in haiku. it is true that you can find examples of different poetic devices in the works of japanese masters, but they are applied to achieve a specific effect, otherwise they are generally unwelcome. it is also untrue that haiku should be 17 syllables in 5-7-5 lines because japanese sound beats (onji) cannot be compared to the syllables in the western languages. haiku usually works best when there are two images juxtaposed to achieve a certain effect, the so called "aha" moment.
Polona...I don't mind at all. I tend to break the rules at times. Perhaps it is best if I do not call these type poems haiku. This is a new form for me. I have noticed that many people have loosened up on the haiku rules, but maybe I should honor them. Thank you. Blessings.
thank you for understanding, don. it doesn't bother me if you call your poems haiku. there are so many "haiku" in the blogworld that have nothing to do with the form apart from having 17 syllables that it doesn't really matter.
did you know that many japanese write the word "haiku" in katakana when referring to the western haiku whereas they use kanji for haiku written by the japanese.
I love the metaphorical use in this one. Haikus are tricky for me!
ReplyDeleteLove is the ineffable
ReplyDeleteEffableness
Of this and that
And of you.
Thanks Doug and welcome to Conscious Living. Yes, metaphors are one variety of tools we use to navigate reality.
ReplyDeleteThanks Dan. Lovely. So true.
"let love be your guide"
ReplyDeleteI wish I always remembered this!
Rob...it's about practice for all of us everyday.
ReplyDeleteIf I had found this in a fortune cookie, I'd have been amazed at how apt these sentiments are for me in particular. And "when all else fails, turning our pain over to it, to let it shelter us..." a true cleansing of the soul.
ReplyDeletewonderful... (and ditto what danji said!) :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Nike...I see you also write poetry, especially love poems. Neat.
ReplyDeleteThanks Darlene...fortune cookie it is. I'm glad it was a good one for you.
Thanks Kathleen. And yes, love is just that.
the third one is so very true. In the darkest moments only love can salvage a spirit.
ReplyDeleteGP...yes I believe that is true. Also, our spirit IS love so the connection already exists. All we need to do is see it. Thanks.
ReplyDeletei needed this...
ReplyDeleteLove is knowing when to say the right things.
ReplyDeleteThanks Imemine...and I think loving is being the right thing...that is who we really are.
ReplyDeletedon, i hope you won't mind my adding a few words here.
ReplyDeletei really like your little inspirational poems, but i have problems calling them haiku.
you know, metaphors (along with simile, personification, personal involvment, judgments...) are to be avoided in haiku. it is true that you can find examples of different poetic devices in the works of japanese masters, but they are applied to achieve a specific effect, otherwise they are generally unwelcome. it is also untrue that haiku should be 17 syllables in 5-7-5 lines because japanese sound beats (onji) cannot be compared to the syllables in the western languages.
haiku usually works best when there are two images juxtaposed to achieve a certain effect, the so called "aha" moment.
Polona...I don't mind at all. I tend to break the rules at times. Perhaps it is best if I do not call these type poems haiku. This is a new form for me. I have noticed that many people have loosened up on the haiku rules, but maybe I should honor them. Thank you. Blessings.
ReplyDeletethank you for understanding, don.
ReplyDeleteit doesn't bother me if you call your poems haiku. there are so many "haiku" in the blogworld that have nothing to do with the form apart from having 17 syllables that it doesn't really matter.
did you know that many japanese write the word "haiku" in katakana when referring to the western haiku whereas they use kanji for haiku written by the japanese.
Polona...I fully understand. Again, thank you. I will work on the traditional form and see what I can produce. Your counsel is appreciated.
ReplyDeletePolona...It's one I like a lot. Thanks for stopping by.
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